All Comments on 'The Box'

Sorry, but I don't get it. Maybe should be in a different category? Just a thought.

Good luck with future efforts.

a few things,

she got divorced so didnt cheat so not LW - wrong category

if it was the LW category you should have used the cuck tag given her husband is taking her back after she screwed dozens of men

also what the point of divorcing a man just to wind up HIS slave anyway? How much was lost on lawyers and paying this fee, and losing her job, all to get back to square one

This should be in fethish or BDSM or non consent depending on the path you travel them down but NOT LW, you are going to get low scores from the cuck haters, and even the cuck lovers because both factions will consider her ex less than for his actions

Really?!? How about fetish or non-consensual? Loving Wives?!? 1*

When the story begins, she's divorced. You're in the WRONG category. There's no marital hanky panky going on here. It's a single woman making a choice. If you want to play fetish/BDSM/Non-Con games that's not a problem. But at least be smart enough to post this garbage in the right category - which is NOT the LW category.

Just awful.

1 star ONLY because negative stars aren't yet available.

Stop because you’re low, not much left to the crap surface.

Go back to your section and stay there, oh and yes, you are talent free.

Anyone who did not figure out the master's identity by half way, please hide in shame.

Yes, this was sooooo predictable.

As others have said, this is obviously a BDSM/Non-Con story, should be there.

There's a reason your attempts at stories score so low, they suck. You say in your bio you want to improve your writing skills, be smart, accept the fact that you have none and stop torturing the readers of LIT. Geez, you can't even get the category right.

Some glaring typos and some childlike errors.

You know where Non con and BDSM are, I would interested to know why you posted in LW

STOP don't write any more shit like this should be in the garbage not on these pages so do us a favour and quit writing and just read other good ones

in the wrong category. ONESTAR

She is not Loving Wife. She is DIVORCED wife.

This is the worst story and plot I've ever come across here on Lit. Put that in your fucking box.

I warned you. But I am wondering, who's demons are being exorcised here? Signed: BTW

I've read many authors that create a series that start in one category and the subsequent chapters move into another. You could have started this as a BDSM and then switch to LW or another category that FIT the story. The readers will go back and read the earlier chapters, in other categories, if they wish to do so. Don't force the action into an incorrect category just to get readers!

Silly story.

"I figure I will crack open the definition of what a Loving Wife could be"

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OK I figure I will crack open the definition of what all these words mean

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I think we can all agree with what I said

Her ex just happened to be the master she served at a nameless company that specializes in BDSM that SHE had to pay for? And it is 18 months of servitude but with at least 4 weeks in total darkness without speaking? Even criminals are protected from i humane treatment like that, and yes, 4 weeks of darkness, solitude and silence in a box that prevents a person from fully stretching will break a person.

And why the fuck is she paying her parents mortgage? If it’s the family home, how many fucking years is the mortgage? Seriously, it should have been paid off a long ass time ago.

Fuck your and the horse you rode in on. Fucking halfwit,

Financially this character is a twit.... I’m sure she could find a guy to tie her up and play S&M with her for free

I’m with Whackdoodle on this 100%

It’s So far beyond dangerous and stupid that it’s ridiculous. This is just the second story of yours that I’ve read or more accurately in this case I skimmed assorted parts of this one. It appears to reflect on you as a person rather than as an author, a broken relationship but with conflicted feelings. As in should I or shouldn’t I?

It’s a stab in the dark because I don’t actually know you, didn’t read your bio either. There’s nothing wrong with the desire to want BDSM or any of its kinks if they make you feel good then that’s great, because with the right (for you) combination it does make you feel free and and happy. The problem lies with the story process, signing up for such a long period of time but without knowing any reason other than the 2 types of very extreme reviews? Moronic. All of the ridiculous financial bullshit was a mechanism to lead into using the dodgy BDSM company FFS she found it on the Dark Web! To submit freely requires trust, why would you use the DW ??! THAT screams dangerous and illegal then to compound it all you used the corny cliche of it just happened to be her ex husband. The ONLY response would have been to safeword out. Divorce isn’t something done lightly or if it is then you didn’t have a real relationship to begin with.

It’s disappointing to expect BDSM and find a fucking disaster, switch it to the Horror category and it might do better.

Tess (UK)

Epic stupidity