All Comments on 'The Breaking of Allison Ch. 01'

@4chuckssite read "Almost Perfect" she did the same to Men--including bitching about them FOLLOWING HER EXACT WORDS, she deserves it.

I’m torn between liking and not liking. People, females, should not be treated cruelly, I don’t care what the story is portraying. However I like the direction the story appears to be heading. If she passes the test with good things happening, I can say “good stuff.” Would prefer the ending to be part of this tale and not a new chapter. As another reader asked, is this the same lawyer Mark we saw in SWB?.

Yes the domination may be a tad severe but there again if I remember correctly it's no different from many other stories here. What sets it above others is the quality of the writing and how one gets carried along with it. 5 stars from me.

Loved you BDSM story Almost Perfect. It was very erotic. This BDSM story is just brutal and as a result it is not erotic. A masochistic man brutally beating, inflicting excruciating pain, almost suffocating her then basically raping and torturing her is not erotic. It’s just plain sick. Even though she is a FemDom, I doubt she would ever treat her male subs this brutally and expect them to respect her as a repeat mistress. I did not rate this story because there are probably readers out there that like this kind of crap. I don’t!

I must know. The description is the exact same. The tattoos, the build, the eye color, his profession, even the bedroom. Was this intended to be the same person? Or was it coincidence? I read this first and loved it so tried out the SWB series. Super curious please let me know.

No it doesn't

Until you actually know how to use the English language, don't comment on it's use

I don't venture into this category often but I promised myself after reading SWB that I would read the rest of your stuff. What I really thought was outstanding was the introductory paragraphs describing Allison. It was great description, almost like watching a movie, and it hooked me into reading the rest. Good writing.

Lied works if there is a direct object

You have a tendency to use "lied" in the wrong context. Lied means someone has told an untruth. You should be using either "lay" or "laid" to describe someone who is in a reclining position.

Delightfully wicked

Very very hot!

Damn... you were right, I do like it.

Read, read, read...

Ouch! Damn!

Read, read, read....

Motherfucker!

Mmm, yeah, big dicks are good...

Oy!

Ready to turn the page...where's the next fucking page...?

Oh, I hate you.

:-P

loved it more please

love the premise, keep writing...

Absolutely Loved this.....

What a story. I love it, the author is not a fave of mine, hope this story gets expanded in many chapters. And that the author does more like this. Thanks