All Comments on 'The Bullpen Ch. 01'

I am in suspense waiting for the next chapter.

You set the pace, the introspective observations. Now on to the real test of time? Will she overly embarrass herself? will she adjust, but only sort of, will she feel urges that she fights to overcome but can't? Please lead us on.

I liked your other stories a lot more. Though this is a well written story, it's not not exciting, and definitely not very erotic at all. She hates being naked, and hates being looked at----maybe this would better fit, under a forced to strip, or some kind of humiliation category???

Granted, we feel sorry for her, but, it's difficult to imagine her (or any other similar woman) feeling sorry for a man in the same position. You should have made her more of an Exhibitionist, or at least less self-conscious.

Slow but very well written start to the story has me looking forward to the rest. It feels like it could have been written by Michael Crichton.

@Anonymous 10/05/07: It gets way hotter!

I felt the way you did, and almost didn't stick with it, but I'm so glad I did.