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SisterJezabelSisterJezabelover 3 years ago

Congrats on publishing your first story!

rawallacerawallaceover 3 years ago
Wonderful Start

Sensitive and warm, showing a mature, romantic relationship based upon understanding and patience. Great first effort. I'll be looking for more.

UltimateHomeBodyUltimateHomeBodyover 3 years ago

Try giving your characters something personal. People are not defined by their occupation or role, so calling them 'the Carpenter' and 'wife' is weird. Destroyed what might gave been a nice tale.

Acceptable if his surname had been Carpenter, but that was not the case in this story.

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Hello. I'm Author and Illustrator Dani Aart. Thank you so much for taking the time to read about me. If you have any request or suggestion for a new story or piece of artwork, if you'd like to comment on something you've already seen or made, I'd truly love to hear from you. ...