All Comments on 'The Chemistry of Control Ch. 01'

I think is is one of the better pieces I have read lately.

It actually made me crack a smile.

We all know a man, and probably a woman like those portrayed here.

If you haven't read it-I enjoyed the sequel also, so check it out!

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Thanks,

Red

When you got to “you are tearing me apart” I was done. I don’t know where this is going, but I don’t care about anyone in this story. I don’t know nor care about their motivations or abilities… I just don’t care.

Worst, I REALLY don’t like the protagonist. I don’t like his main love interest, and am ambivalent towards his rival.