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marklionabout 15 years agoGreat Second Chapter!!!
Does a great second chapter you wrote for the series. I like how Jason took Laysea's virginity during this chapter. The way you described her orgasm was exquisite and I love the way you use the words throughout this chapter. I understand what you are saying at the beginning of the chapter about the"anonymous" people that leave criticisms of the authors.
sineraabout 15 years agoah Cin!
You *know* I love this story (and the sequels!! *tease*tease*) Your readers are gonna LOVE you!!
(DJ)
kiwiplumabout 14 years agohmm
I like the story line but it's a bit rushed and could do with more character development. Also the dialogue is a bit stilted.
nestorb30about 6 years agoOk this doesn't make sense
Don't have penetrative sex. Lots of oral and fingering. Problem solved. No required marriage. Seems logical to me
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