All Comments on 'The Company Pool Party'

Brilliant! Stripping to suspenders and stockings on the beach really gets attention? Even on nude beaches, Jenny's done it several times!

Great story really liked that. Well done :D

The boss at the end, ruined it for me. Hubby is a cuck.

Yes, the ending ruined it all. Will she now be expected to be the Corporate Slut, getting fucked by the Boss on a regular basis? It just doesn't work.

So no ce!

The husband isn’t intended to be seen as a cuck. He is actually the Dom in a light Dom sub relationship. But like most things, it’s all in the eyes of the reader.

I love surprise endings. Great story, well written. I want a bikini like that... and a job that permissive.

Very well done, and the boss appearing at the end was perfect. Your description of the tease was excellent, and it was good how she glided into the new persona. You need to improve your proof reading - too many errors, particularly missing words, which is unusual. Tense switching is disconcert to the reader - stick to one, preferably the past.

Anonymous,

Thank for the review and critique. Story was written in a rush for someone, typing it out on an old iPhone. I’ll try to do better in the future.

Would love to see your write an explicit follow through. No worries, if you'd rather tease us with your writing, you will still have my attention.

Not a bad story. A bit more background on the type of company and why the pool

Arties are the way they are. Most companies wouldn’t permit any of the women doing something like this. Maybe explain why Eugene allows it.