All Comments on 'The Compliant Groom'

Interesting premise.

There must be a reason why dialog isn't put in quotation marks. A bad choice.

Lacks preliminaries.

He's a real virgin. He's never seen any naked woman, no less her. But he must have thought about her naked. She could have explored that before real action got underway. Had he watched porn? What kind? Dis he like it when the woman was the leder, the instigator? What about it did he like? And so on.

Two stars.

" at the start of a conversation and at the end use "

If you don't it is just a mess of words which means it's not good writing.

The story itself was basic and a bit uncomfortable to read unless you're a freak.

I liked it for what it was. 5 stars for a simple story where she is in charge but not cruel or ridiculous.

Amazing quick and short story. Looking forward to more amazing stories from you. And especially....

Awesome! Short and hot. Eager to see more amazing work from You. Especially..

Very enjoyable. Nice style, clear and tight writing. Get over the quotation marks hang-up you guys! It works, You can figure out what's going on.

Debated between 4 and 3 stars. Her plan to run the household seemed a bit too controling. While he was mousy, he should have been a little resistant to her overbearing. More of how they differed in physique could give the imagery of the couple.

Had to go with 5 stars. I suppose she had to do the breath play & choking as part of establishing her control. I'd like to read a chapter about the honeymoon. Then a chapter about settling into their home life would have the stage set for their new life. I wonder if he will do windows with or without an apron by day or night LOL