All Comments on 'The Consequences of Crime Ch. 05'

First. it was too detached, as if you were trying to get to the end as quickly as possible. Second, the proofreading left a lot to be desired. "She gauged a little..." Huh? What was she measuring? "I'm wore out..." an' purty ignurnt, too, from the sound of it. Last, it just didn't work. The plot (yes, I read the earlier entries) is just not workable.

i really liked your story. i hope you continue to write more. i cant wait to see where it goes!

Hope to read more soon... really enjoyed this one in particular.

Please keep these coming. Im hoping this develops a lot more and the sex gets better and maybe involves all three or even getting monica blowing other people to aork off her debt.