All Comments on 'The Coppertone Girl'

"You shall be well done as a roasted chicken had I remained silent"??

Language off on holiday along with Kristen, Karen, and the gang?

I like it, quick and to the point.

No-one over here talks like that at all ....

I also liked it - as said previously: short and to the point - a little gem.

By the way 'some' people in the UK do talk like that and as for 'Pointless', stop nitpicking - are you a proof reader ?

"Pointless" and others are so right - it is bad authorship not to proofread your work. To serious readers, it is very "off-putting" to have the main character changing her name every couple of paragraphs. The language is delightful, the narrative flows well, but, if you want us to read your work, I advise that you read it firstly! Or else - why should we?