by katxmeowx
I am not a writer. Something is missing in this 2-chapter story. - All the right words are there - kissing, lust, fucking, but it all seems superficial.
The ingredients are there, why don't they mix into an entertaining, even fascinating, relationship? - I don't know but the text just left me unsatisfied - something was missing - I don't know what - but, of course, I'm not a writer.
Kat, I thinks you have a lot to learn - or some deeper insight into psychology (feelings between men/women) - maybe some maturity? I don't know - something is missing, though.
I enjoyed the story, but it seemed superficial.