All Comments on 'The Crystal Pt. 02: Bad Teacher'

Great, MORE please. This has loads of potential.

Loved where the story was going, but hated how it ended up in the end so suddenly

Completely agree with first 2 comments. Enjoyed reading Miss Campbell's nc/reluctant activities before she became "sluttified". Perhaps too much too soon? Do consider a Crystal redux or another teacher with a more gradual seduction and exploitation. My selfish request is testament to your writing skills. In other words, it's your fault (kidding ofc). Lol.

This started well, but went off the rails from an MC story to that of a slutty teacher. I wish you'd stuck to the MC theme for this one.

Enjoyed "The Crystal" especially PT. 01. That first installment included the necessary but ultra erotic little details that build the readers' interest and anticipation. Items such as describing her body and clothing, boyfriend, her naivety and kind nature etc allowed the reader to feel "in on the hunt" so to speak. Pt. 02 had few similar details leaving readers with the "wham bam thank you mam" feeling. Maybe you intentionally wrote 02 this way because you decided mind control wasn't your thing or to avoid requests for additional chapters. It didn't work and readers want more or similar tales from you. After all, you are OldnotDead71.

Jamal turned 18 and accepted a ride on her SUV to her condo. He used his now deceased grandmother's crystal on Denise Campbell eyes and got the same reaction as before. The young couple fucked hard in bed deeply in love with each other. Nobody in Jamal's family thought about the crystal necklace and it was a keeper to him plus it led him to remember and respect his grandmother by taking good care of Denise. He encouraged Denise to sell houses and she became the breadwinner. Jamal got a job in construction. Denise impregnated with Jamal's baby, loved him more and consummated her love to him by holding hands and promising 100 percent loyalty to each other. They had two more girls to go with their son. The crystal necklace remains locked in their safe box

This one SCREAMS for additional sequels. Less is more sometimes but not in this case.