All Comments on 'The Cubicle Ch. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
Is Antoine male or female?

Your personal pronouns are all over the place. This is the worst...

"He put his elbows on the desk and buried his face in her hands"

You can't even keep Antoine's gender consistent within the one sentence.

pentheswordpentheswordalmost 11 years ago
Nice

I liked how you played up the internal conflict. Well done!

ScootertalesScootertalesalmost 11 years agoAuthor
Antoine is male

Sorry about the pronoun mix up with him.

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