All Comments on 'The Daniel Chronicles Ch. 01'

Chris vs Daniel got messed up once or twice just after he grabbed his arm at the top of the stairs section.

Interesting conceit. I don't want to discourage the author from continuing to write, but the story should be reviewed for errors and corrected at least once before posting.

After drugging his friend and turning his loving wife against him, when does he admit he is a rapist?

That's what he is, regardless of what he tells himself and considering at the end he didn't even know whom he was fucking it's evident that he destroyed his friends marriage. The least he could do is be honest about it.

I do love it when a comment is made about mistakes and has not been proofread itself.

Good start I can't wait for it to get all messed up.