All Comments on 'The Day a Guy Tried to Interfere'

to stupid lesbians who goes from straight to pussy licer they are taught a lession about being fuck by a real dick and not a whores fake one

This story was great!

What a weird and hateful comment from the first anon. person (and so wonderfully well-written LOL) I guess it takes all kinds, even the delusional.

Anyway this story has a some good moments in it, the plot needs some work though. Why would a loving person subject their partner to being hit on when it obviously is distressful to her?

You need to decide before starting the story what POV you want to write it from, and stick with it. There is an extreme difference between "I"/"you" and "he", "she",etc. Also, you should learn the difference between your (second person possessive), and you're (contraction meaning "you are"). I actually hate the english language, it was forced on my gaelic and french ancesters by military power, and I think the world is a lesser place because of that. However, I accept that we have to "bloom where we are planted" and have to make the most of what our ancestors left us.