by Consecration
Im not sure what just happened... But it seemed well done... Like a foreigner watching a native ritual.. Intrigued but lost...
I'm fairly new to this, so please don't hold back.
I don't really know what was going on here. The first several lines are so disorganized, chaotic, incomplete thoughts, I can't tell who the characters are, how many of them there are, where they are, or what they are doing.
I want to say good attempt but the structure was so fractured I didn't read much.