All Comments on 'The Demigod: Citrine 01'

OK, this is a pretty good start. I wasn't sure at first, it felt a little mechanical, a bit forced. As it went on it became more complex, more detailed, and more emotionally complex. That's better.

I recieved this feedback via email, which might be the same as above, but I figured I'd put it here regardless as it's about Citrine 1.

I do appreciate all the feedback. It means a lot. Tgank you.

"I doubt many people reach out to the authors on sites like this but I just wanted to let you know I read citrine yesterday and it was awesome! I hope you continue to write more because I was super interested in the story regardless of the erotic aspects though of course they never hurt. Keep up the good work!"

PS: Citrine 2 is awaiting webmaster approval.

Muito bom, aguardando ansiosamente pela continuação

The first part started off a bit clunky, got much smoother through the climax of the story (pun intended), however the ending isn't exactly in-step with the tone of the rest of the story.

Very hot i love the emphasis on control and his clear motivations