All Comments on 'The Devil's Melted Heart'

Perhaps you need to read the story aloud as there are bits that seem to be missing. I am confused as to how she arrived there, what exactly he is doing with her, and who the heck else is there. Is he man or is he beast? Or is he simply a figment of her imagination? In my mind, there are too many issues that need to be cleaned up, fractures that need to be fixed before the story becomes whole. The opportunity for it to be amazing is there. Just find it. And keep writing!

This was an interesting concept. I did not find it to be confusing, and it was very erotic. Good job, J.

This was an interesting concept. I did not find it to be confusing, and it was very erotic. Good job, J.