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johntcookseyabout 5 years agoMore about these characters
Even though it was a quick story, the characters were well rendered and compelling. I would love to read more about them, Marla and the cops, the mom and dad, and of course, Jenny and Craig. I hope this is a teaser for more to come. Thanks. *****
Anonymousabout 5 years agoI hope you have a better fate in mind for the young couple
Since Craig has his inheritance, things should work out just fine.
The_Pedantabout 5 years agoA bit staccato in style.
You do need an editor, as you said.
The punctuation is a bit hit and miss and by the way, "paid" is correct, not "payed".
It was a good tale, though.
Anonymousabout 5 years agoexcellent start of a romance story
I really enjoyed reading this. looking forward to next chapter. Both escaping an past full abuse.
Anonymousover 3 years agoHOPE!!!!!!!!
hope you are still with us. this site has many assnomeous english junkies. you pourtray beliveable people. LOVE slap hapy papy#9
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