All Comments on 'The Director's Kitten'

This Is so good, I can't wait for the next chapter!

Which means your stories are out of order. You might want to resubmit them as Director 01: - Director 02: - Director 03: - so that you control the order, otherwise you'll have to do what JBEdwards did and publish a map.

That said, your writing is strong, and you don't ever make the rookie mistake of leaving a story hanging in the middle of a scene. You have one of the same weaknesses I do, you tend to write in the past tense. "He was an expert at searching." Why is he no longer an expert at searching? What happened to him? "She was agile," Why is she no longer agile in the middle of climbing a fence. Write in the present 'is' instead of 'was'. I can;t help myself either, I do it all the time. But I go back and look for those past tense words and make sure they only apply to the past.

I love your work so much I would promise to be your proofreader and promise two day turnaround.

Mind control is one of my favorite fantasies, I find the idea very appealing since I've felt so not in control of most of my life. A great start to what promises to be a well thought out and written story. I look forward to reading the next episode. As this is my first foray into your writing and the first story you posted here I have added you to my favorites list. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.