All Comments on 'The Door Prize'

Great story. Very well written. Never a dull moment. Kept me guessing all along. I could identify with the heros very much. I enjoy stories where a nice guy does well without having to mean to someone, and can help someone along the way. I really am looking forward to more stories from you.

Well written. A bit of every writer's fantasy perhaps, but then it is from that fantasizing our stories come from. I was fearful throughout that she was a setup of some kind, or that hidden cameras were entertaining the rest. Glad you kept to sweet.

Extremely well written. Look forward to seeing more.

This was a great story and I hop[e that you are considering a sequel or even more than one!

Please continue very soon and again thank you for a pleasent story

This was a work of art. I have to say that you have real talent. i will be lookinf for more submitions by you, and look forward to a sequal of this particular story, if one should ever arise...great job...

Overall, wonderful story. 100% loved it. You have a knack of making your characters appear intelligent rather than saying they are.

I loved that stuff about Stephanie coming across as well.. non-sexual. I, for one, seem to channel 'prude' exceptionally well and even my best friend was shocked when she first found out about my ideas about sex. Everybody assumes that because I'm rather high-faluting, moralistic and Chinese I'm going to be a prude. This is most certainly not the case. My close friends know that I'm actually a bit of a fiend, but some of those (these 'shy girls' are genuine prudes--no sex before marriage, or sex 'eww!') now seem to think I'm a slut. I haven't done anything to warrant that statement but people seem to assume that if you are somewhat orgasm-addicted you're going to be promiscuous. Ah well, at any rate, very few really, actually nobody, understands my attitude towards sex.

Gah, ranted about myself. Anyway... well done on this story. Definitely one of my favourites ever. I like this one more than 'last nice guy in town' actually, which I loved.

Well written and ORIGINAL !! Doesn't happen often. Such a relief from thhe common Yahoo's who don't know the difference between your/you're; its/it's and whose characters 'shutter', not shudder. I will never understand why so many people are obsessed with outdoor window coverings. Oh well, to each his own. In any event you write well and are literate. Again, for that I thank you.

After reading some of the other stories on this site, reading this story was like finding a diamond in a mountain of sludge. I hope to read more of your stories soon.

wasn't expecting a story like this. absolutely incredable.

This story deserves 100%. It is rare to find such a great story like this on this website. Everything was perfect from the original plot to the character development, nothing but loving sex between two people. No sequel is necessary, as what happens from this point on should be left up to the reader's imagination. Keep writing wonderful stories like this. You have a knack for writing well-developed short stories.

Damn, this one is a probably the best story here. Heres a hint, try and get your work published.

Very well written I look forward to more of your storys. I think you have the ability to go somewhere man.

I loved "The last Nice Guy In Town" and yet this one hit my top favorite folder even faster!

I really like those shy guy becomes a winner stories, probably because it hits so close to home. Kind of makes me wish I was a young guy again, just so I could step into a situation like Michael has. {sigh} Oh well, even a guy on the long side of fifty can dream of might have beens or (dare I hope) what might be.

Kydreamer

I've been reading erotica for over 10 years. This is hands down the best story I've ever read. I'd like to read more.

Not only was this story hot, it had AMAZING plot! I was into EVERY aspect of the story, its multiple sides. Great stuff! Usually it's novels that tend to involve you in the plot, making you want to BE the protagonist or live a similar life or have similar experiences. It's rare that an "erotic" story can do the same, but this one does!!

Great story line. Very creative and unique. The plot draws the reader into a well written story. Love making was not the focus but a complimenting part of the story. Loved it from start to finish!

A sexy romantic novelette. And funny too! Kinda takes you back to your first love. Not those circumstances but the emotional feelings! Thoroughly enjoyed this story. And look forward to more of your wtitings.

Definitely one of the best stories I've read. Keep up the writing and I look forward to reading more.

... refers to my comment. It was a tremendously well written story. Kudos to setting, plot development, character development, and style. That and the fact that Stephanie sounds like an incredible (re:dream) girl insofar as my personal tastes are concerned.

Very much enjoyed the story, great flow to it. Maybe could have developed Stephanie's character a bit more, but other than that well written and enjoyable. Will definitely read your other stories and look forward to more.

or at least deparately want to. The story rode the line of plausibility and had a great pull toward suspension of disbelief (the marks for me of transcending into a work of art not just a good story). I would have enjoyed it if we heard about the eating of Stephanie's deliciousness, but her chosing him was great... that was just a little too well forshadowed with the comment about him not missing the announcement so no real tension or suprise there... if either you'd had it go farther with the two girls so you felt the conflict more knowing he was going to be chosen or made it less obvious that it was him (maybe if you'd set up some idea that Danny thought it was to be his prize or something), but i pick a nit that isn't that big of deal, but it was a great read...

Humor, Romance, hot Erotica, simple-but-gret Plot, Realistic characters that everyone would love, and professional way of putting it down for everyone to read. Man, you got it all in this thing :D If I could rate it higher I would definitely do it. This is one of the best I've read in LitE ^^ Rock on.

He writes very well, and puts together a good plot, with excellent follow through.

I've never read a more stunning story like this. It is simply the best ever. Keep up the good work!

What a story. I couldn't stop reading it. The images seared my mind.

;-)

Everyone already said so: Great. As in characters, plot, ..., everything. Thank you.

Thank-you, once again, for characters of true character and integrity. I had lost hope of finding anything but porn when I found your earlier story "The last nice guy". Today is my first return to this site in several months. I appreciate your attention to detail and pacing; but most of all, the integrity of your characters. Are you Stephanie?

loved every letter of it!

I don't even know what to say about it. You've got a powerful handle on language and dialogue, and the twists at every turn were riveting. Awesome!

Because you have asked for my opinion on this story, I will give it in a public fashion. I don't think you really need my opinion after reading ALL the others because there are no more great words left for me to use. I'm just sorry my little vacation kept me from this one for so long. Absolutely wonderful. You are such a great writer and this one definetly deserves all the praise it is getting and more. A winner!!!!Smooches

Your stories are why I still come back to Literotica. The Door Prize, The Last NIce Guy, evan Cum Bath are all great stories well worth weeding through all the others for. Though you lack in quantity you certanly make up for it in quality. I can not wait for your next.

THANK YOU

CW

MORE!

I really enjoyed The Door Prize. I'm hoping there will be a second part to this one. A definite keeper.

please please please write a follow up

another fabulous piece of writing, this is exactly the sort of work i would be hoping to get from my local bookstore or library. have you been published? and if so what? if not, why the hell not?!!

thankyou, inspiring and a joy to read.

This was absolutely fantastic. You have mad talant and should be sending your work to publishers. If you have been published please let us know where we can buy.

This has just become my favorite story here. It's funny, it's hot, it's amazingly well-written...what's not to like? :) The funny thing is that they remind me of some people I used to know and love. It's a very warm-and-fuzzy-and-sexy feelings story. ;) Thanks for writing this. Now I just have to read the rest. :)

Another fantastic story.

Keep up the great work

You have the touch Stefan J.! Writers like you and Kiwiwolf are really too good to be giving it away like this, but it is what makes you great instead of merely good. I believe that we will be paying soon enough, if we aren't already.

I for one will be standing in line at the local book store if I find out you are being published. Even better, I hope I find out about the signing if that happens! Keep writing man, don't let this talent go to waste!

The only comment that I can think of is BRAVO!!!!!

this is the first story I have made a comment on - none others have been worthy. Stefan_J is an incredible author. Thanks for the good reads.

Sequel!!!!

I hope that, if there is a sequel, Stephanie gets involved with the research and the writing of the novel. I'd also like to see her sister become involved. It's pretty clear that the two supporting characters are representative of what people can accomplish if they are treated right and encouraged. I think Stephanie is actually extremely smart and has concealed it. Her sister, far from being a "door prize," was picked for a reason.

Great writing. I think this should have been in the First Time or Romance section, but that's my biased opinion.

God, what a great story. Please, continue...

This is one of the best writings I have read in a long while. I hope you keep up the good work!!!!!!!!

I HAVE GOT TO SEE A SEQUEL!! Its GREAT!

super hot.

A significant cut above even the good stories

All too often I find the stories here on Literotica to be far too one-sided. And so it is a genuine pleasure to find stories that have the emotional color to capture one's imagination on many levels - that are actually *stories*. Thank you.

We're not worthy, we're not worthy.

Plot, charachters(sp) with depth and appeal, plot twist (the door prize was forshadowed, but had to be), and it did not end with "wham, bam, thank you maam."

Juicy

Two words: holy shit

Well written. Please keep writing!!

An excellent play on different mindsets that people can have. Beautifully written, and a must read for any new literotican reader. Much more beautiful than a stroke story.

Very inspiring erotic tale and I loved it.

…right? The opening paragraph sounds like Tom Clancy on drugs.

wow. great story dude. awesome. quite apart from the amazing erotic scenes, good plot, too. Definitely the best story i've read on here so far.

of great magnitude - well done and most entertaining.

The sex was grand - but the imaginative story was better.

More Please - With highest Regard

Good job Stefan. I'd love to read something from you in a sci-fi vein, I think it would match your flow of writing. Thanks.

Good story.

Way too much about the car - Danny's not important enough to spend all that time on his car.

Excellent story! Thanks for sharing your imagination......left me feeling satisfied!

Excellent story. Thank you.

I enjoyed the story very much. I am a little slow so I might have to read it again to get the full impact of what went on. It was a neat idea and you executed it well. Thanks for a good read.

Excellent story. The sex was excellent, but the truely great part of this story is the actual story behind it. Amazing characters and events.

Amazing i mean, wow. Eric is truly imposing. Its beyonds ecellent. More of the same genre. more ore more!!!!

It was an excellent story! I enjoyed it tremendously. :)

I enjoyed this story greatly and after a hard day at work it made me feel silly for moping... i loved all of it.. the imigination portrayed from michaels point of view as well as the intelligence that just oozed from ray/stoner!!! Thank you. I will be checking out more of your work definately!!

I liked your story, and i believe teh character of Eric was VERY nicely developed, but try not to use quite so many adjectives. It makes the story seem fake, in a sense, or like you are trying to take up space. But otherwise, it was a great story. For your next work, try something closer to science fiction. Keep up the good work

Your story was fantastic. Have you ever thought about writing romance novels, erotic literature?.. You'd probably be pretty good at it. You have the talent of intergrating sex with a good story. It stimulates both the mind and the body. Thanks for cheering up my day, simply by writing it.

On several ocasions, Michael asked Stephanie if she would like him to eat her. Obviously, that must have been something Michael enjoyed, and since he won the door prize, perhaps, in addition to all of the other wonderful things he wound up with, (which I am very jealous of), he should have been able to have gotten the chance to do something that he (and I) enjoyed doing.

I really enjoyed this story. However, I agree that the foreshadowing in the beginning was rather obvious, and I found it difficult to believe that a multi-millionnaire author would want to write a book with a college student, especially one whom he has never met. The sex was great, but I thought it diminished in quality after they left the dance floor. The first part was really hot (even about Danny in the beginning), but I felt like the cuddling at the end as well as Stoner's involvement was unnecessary. Still, one of the best stories I've ever read on lit.

I'm depressed there's no sequel! This is a truely amazing story. VERY well written.

Write one for us! Your Fans!

Best story I've read on Literotica. Well done. Thank you very much.

I've been coming to Literotica for close to a decade now, and I've never come across a story that I genuinely wanted to compliment the author on. This story was simply amazing. It was erotic, sweet, intelligent, and if this sounds a little hokey, it was-IS inspirational. You're a fantastic writer.

An unbelievable piece of work that gave an uplift to me. thank you for the excellent story. Bravo

amazing story, bravo!

I loved the story, but doubt that anyone could be that lucky................

I have to say that I was in an antsy mood and flipped thru several stories on here till I came upon yours. Yours kept me interested till the end so, in my book, that's a good thing. Bravo!

Your work was clear aand concise. The premise was a little hard to beleive but this is fiction after all. I thoroughly enjoyed it. A fine example of what good writing should be; good grammer, good sentence structure and no misspelling. Thanks again.

I read this story when it was firstposted and have been looking for it to read again ever since. It's just as good now as the first time round. One of literoticas best.

This is an awesome story! Well written and it makes you long for a sequel! Great Job!!

i absoulety love your story. i couldn't stop reading it. =) i'll be reading more of your stuff.

One of the best stories I've ever read here by far. Amazing style and it had me sucked in from start to finish. You're a great writer and this piece of work can attest to that.

Similarly to the way many of Scorpio44 & Scorpio44a's protagonists want to eliminate the color red from their lives, I like to minimize if not remove melodrama from mine. I realize that melodrama is not subject to control in life, but it is in fiction. Melodrama in life is evidence that God if such there be has a snide sense of humor and is a prankster that puts Norse mythology's Loki to shame. Melodrama's primary usage appears to be the injection of useless pain into people's lives. Fortunately you didn't take it there, but only toyed with it on the surface. Thanks.

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It is difficult for a reader to tell a writer exactly what they are doing right. If a story is written well the proof is in the readers enjoyment of that story. To say that you write well is to undervalue all of the may aspects of that skill. However I have just read a reasonably believeable, well written story, with an interesting story line. I thought that it had very good character development and that it set the foundation for many more chapters which I feel I would also enjoy reading. If you can keep combining all of the aspects of story telling as well as you did in this project, I and many others will keep enjoying your efforts. Anon jerry

Your writing is well paced, with just the right touches of detail. I thouroughly enjoyed the way you took you hero from his hum drum every day experience to one of ultimate possibilities, throough the medium of a beautiful woman and a party which turns out to have him as the guest of honor. Stephanie is a well developed creature with depth and allure that come from true beauty. You have a gift for crafting a well written story with nuance and clarity. Thank you.

The number of facepalm cliche lines and eye-roll-worthy flashbacks and details really took this story down many notches. Minus those elements, I'd say that the whole thing is handled a bit more unrealistically than necessary. It really takes a "fantastic" track. Also, Stephanie isn't given much of any development at all, and I still can't convince myself that she would pick the immature Michael. I recommend adding more backstory.

Also, I wanted to know where things went from there. That was probably the biggest positive of the story.

Its a real pity that you've stopped writing because I would really like to see where this story ends up. Its a good first part but when will you carry it on?

I -love- the fact you ended the story. So few authors know how to truly conclude something, as well as bring a character to life as vividly as you have. Loved the story, and it is definitley one of my top picks EVER. Look forward to seeing other works from you.

I really enjoyed this story. It's too bad something like this doesn't happen in real life, even if it were only for a few people.

I particularly liked the moral position the girl takes and the inner dialog of your main character. I think it was a wise choice for your character to take time to catch up with the events that were happening; you did that in several places and I think that also made the story very effective.

The Door Prize Really deserves a sequel. There's so much that can be expanded on! Please?

I feared this would lead to a typical story of the male perspective after the intro details about cars, but it took a pleasant turn to a mixture of male & female aspects. I was able to keep reading to come to this conclusion because of the natural flow in the language. It felt professionally written. Also, as a personal aside, it's a fantasy of mine to be that center of attention so this hit home for me on that level. The only real criticism would be the pregnancy scare part. I'm not sure why that was included since it kind of killed the mood for me, & it didn't lead to anything. Besides that, I thoroughly enjoyed the story. Thanks for sharing.

Sasha

You are an amazing writer. I was wishing for an entire book to curl up with. :)

Seriously, this is great writing and story telling at its best. Maybe you didn't intend to write a follow-up story, but this story ending screams for one (or two or more) chapters to be written.

If not, I thank you for what you did write. It was a pleasure to read.

Keep on writing.

The idea of a sequel sounds delectably enticing to me as well. The story is written with a depth of detail and hungry passion that few stories on here contain. I like that it, while being intensely and enjoyably sex-oriented, has a story to it as well, despite being about a less than 24-hour scene, and the potential that it ends with is quite satisfying.

The grammar and spelling have no faults that I can see, the storyline is great for such a short scene, and the sex scenes and tension are detailed and steamy enough to draw me in and turn me on. Also, you managed to give a "there is a future to this" feel to a single night, another feat that is harder than it seems.

The only objection I have to the story is the last line... It would have ended better if it was taken out, because it turns the ending from an uplifting, creative, and passionate conclusion to something that seems like it should have been longer. When the ending to a story is generalized and summarized in such a manner, it seems, at least to me, as though the author just got tired of the story and wanted it to end. Also, it seems an obvious set-up for a sequel, despite the fact one has not been posted.

Thank you for such an enjoyable story, and keep writing!

this is not a story i would normally pick to read but am glad i did. besides being excellently written, it was like every guys dream come true. thank you.

I know that is asking alot, but your style and descriptions convey hope - so please let me know when you have more!

Should be a movie!!! That was a great read & I want to know more! It felt almost real & I agree with the other comment about "hope." Excellent job!

Stefan, I didn't think I'd ever be using this word to describe a story on Literotica, but that was downright uplifting! Hot as hell too. I loved it.