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All Comments on 'The DPS Files Pt. 01: Frustrated'

by kimwipes

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AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
DPS Frustrated

You've a real problem with punctuation. This needs to be fixed before you hit send.

Could be a hot story, but it's a bit jangled and jarring.

Slow down on part 2 and rewrite it after your first draft.

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
Huh? What punctuation problem?

I used to score educational-testing essays and saw no issues.

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago

Fuck i want more. Damn i wish i was her

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