All Comments on 'The Elevator'

Good start but seems incomplete

You stopped when it was finally getting good? FTDS!

More?

hope theres more??

Definitely need a second part to this story. Maybe in an office or hotel room?

Sexy hot story! When they are amazed at his bare body's appearance, does Justin have any sexy hair on that manly chest? Something else fr the women to be amazed by!

Strange place to end it so abruptly - second instalment isn’t obvious, but see if you can make it work. Loved the typo for ‘garter’.

I agree with the others on it being a weird place to stop.

And besides the garter/garder typo, you had a few others that an editor / proofreader might help with (waste/waist, and Heather seemed to always be lower case)

But still very hot, and seems unfinished

Ok but please spell check your work!

The elevator break free at the end? What happened?

Whoa! Was your power knocked out, too? Hurry up, for chrissakes you can't leave us hanging! Quick, or I start kicking stars off the neon review marquee.

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Where’s the rest?!

Is this supposed to be the whole story? It feels incomplete. A good hot start, but not really a whole story yet.

Well you did a shit job with that one. Why even bother?