The story is enjoyable and you certainly seem to know the ottawa area. I note that you are running your stories through a spell checker but you are not rereding for word context or mistyped words.
Compulsive writer desperately trying to get all of the idea out from his mind. Please feel free to message me directly, I love to hear constructive feedback, I'm very aware that anything can always be better, but that sometimes it just needs to be done. Just be brave enough ...