All Comments on 'The Erotic Adventures of S & J Ch. 02'

You arbitrarily made a 'chapter' split in the middle of one scene. The more appropriate place to split would have been before they went into the forest, but that would have made the second chapter very short. So, keeping it all one introductory chapter would have been best.

Then you would be ending Ch 1 at the cliffhanger of Meralin's sister's intro, and picking up Ch 2 with the fallout of being caught by the sister. See how it would have been better, suspense-wise?

Even the small delay between Ch 1 & Ch 2, which you created artificially, is/was enough to interrupt the just developing connection with your two main characters.

Look forward to seeing where you're going with this.

GeoD