by ms_chevis
This is weak and lazy. He just goes along with the abuse, doesn't fight back, takes a sip of a spiked drink and goes into a coma. He should be kicking melody's ass and calling the police. This is way past playing games, it's gang rape. The way the MC is portrayed, he shouldn't be in college, he should be in special ed.
Needs to be proof read- misspelled words and swapped Melody for Stephanie several times.
Just a heads-up. Keep the names straight with what's happening. Kind of confusing when Stephanie is being raped and you call her Melody more than once.
This might sound harsh but a year's break from this story and you couldn't find an editor or more inspiration than the main character getting raped with a dash of victim blaming? The first chapter was interesting despite its stylistic flaws. I think this continuation missed the mark.