All Comments on 'The Floating World Pt. 06: Madelyn'

When I write, I always have a mind's eye vision of my characters. Sometimes I draw them - my drawings of Madelyn and Juliette are here:

https://www.literotica.com/i/the-floating-world-artwork

Very probably not as you imagine them, but they're as I see them.

This is the first story I have read from this author.

What a delectable and welll written story.

I will be reading more of this saga, hoping to find the same slow developing tease and heat between the characters.

Very well done.

V.

I'm guessing you set out to create Madelyn as the anti-Adam, the yang to his yin. Contrasting your male hedonist, generous and patient, you've written a female hedonist, narcissistic and impulsive. While he relishes the pleasures of polite society, she subverts them to her own desire. While Adam loves women of all sorts, Madelyn loves only one.

Assuming that was your intent, I'd say you succeeded exceptionally. Because I dislike Madelyn as much as I like Adam. I'm a bit disappointed in him for playing her game but I can see how she would be a temptation he wouldn't like to deny himself. So I suppose I can forgive him one more chapter. Although that "Fuck you, bitch!" line at the truck stop was wholly out of character and quite unforgivable.

Juliette is another matter, a character discovering her own hedonistic desire but at a cross roads as to how to express it. Given such contrasting examples, I'm curious to see if she chooses one mentor over the other, or if she charts her own course.

I misread the line that I thought was so out of character for Adam. It's not "Fuck you, bitch" but rather "Fuck, you bitch" which has a very different emphasis. Commas matter. I'm so glad I got that wrong.

This has the feel of another place and time. Certainly something new and unusual from this unusually talented writer..

I'm glad you dared to write BDSM, your characters are perfect. Just enough tease & raw sex & the denial Adam suffers is just the way he should. xox

This writer never fails me, I had my orgasm before both the ladies, I have orgasms reading all of his stories what a talented writer. He is the only writer who can make the word 'cunt' sound erotic. I chastised him abouts it's cohesiveness and over use. But he has proved me wrong and now I love seeing him use it. Does anyone bring better characters into their stories, Juiiette, Mandy, Adam, who we have met often, what a perfect three. I hope in future chapters we get to read his beautiful descriptive prose, telling us about Adam pushing his big coc k deep into both women's 'cunts'. If we had the perfect scenario, Mandy with a strap on ( she seems the type to use one) and Adams big cock double penetrating the delectable Juliette. 20* if I could