All Comments on 'The Girl and the Dragon'

Not quite my cup of tea. The beginning of the story reminded me so much of J.K Rowling's writing. Doesn't feel like an adult theme of erotica. It doesn't command my attention. I must say it was quite dry.

And it would be better if you re-read your story before submitting as there were some paragraphs that were a repetition.

That aside, it's your first story and there are hidden potential. You just have to really dig into them.

I liked the mix of medieval fantasy and erotica. Definitely different. Worth developing.

I liked the idea of your story, but thought it could of been developed a bit more. Had a few typos and an entire paragraph that was repeated...better editing would of made the rating higher.

Has been mentioned on the New Story Review thread in the Author's Hangout Forum.

people seem to be zooming in on the repetition - and while i too was a little confused, i think it was intentional. and it didn't detract from the story for me.

i have not generally enjoyed "non-human" stories as a whole. they seem to be farther outside my imagination. this one, however, caught my attention in a good way. the only criticism i would offer is that there needs to be more detail. the more detailed and fleshed out your story is, the more it holds people's attention.

over all, i'd say a good effort for a first story.

You're well on your way to something really good, and then -poof- you're done? Why bother to build the characters if you're not going to use them? We want more! :)

I love dragons so this story works for me. But I want more. editng and spell check will improve the story. When will see more of this story????

You've done well so far and i'm looking forward to another chapter, but you need to really read through your stories before you submit them. There were a couple of paragraphs the same, and although I think it was meant to be intentional, the way you wrote it was confusing. However this story has great potential and I hope you write another chapter.

More??? Keep em cummin'. Great begining.

Forgetting that duplication, The story was great! Your writing and imagination puts most authors in here to shame. Just goes to show that stories need not be filled with gross sex and crude language to be erotic-(and fun!) I don't know what that other critic wanted for an ending; I thought yours was fine. But you really should try some more like this, its that good!

This was the first erotic story i ever read it will always be my favirite. im a huge fanatic of dragons. so i very picky about not just pictures of dragons but of how dragons talk and act in a story. you have potential lots of it. you should write more stories with dragons. or countiue this one into more chapters. id like for you to go more into the dragons part of the world and more of the humans. just a lttle more description. good job , real good job