All Comments on 'The Guardian'

I think it's really well written. I'll edit any other stories if you want(:

Great promise, hope you will continue to contribute stories. Would love more about Kyle and the Guardian or any topic your creativity can imagine. Very well written.

But you could have given us a warning (At the top, after or before the no edittor warning) about the M/M sex. Although if you have more story to this story, I wouldn't mind; I skim the sex anyhow... At least when I'm looking for a good read :) . And that is what I'd call this!

I liked it alot. One good thing you did was explaining the werewolf's past and the people he used to protect. I liked the fact that he was fierce enough to murder those people, yet he had a tenderness for this guy. My only disappointment is that he left Kyle at the end. I'd have liked to see them together given Kyle's happiness in nature vs. his lonely lifestyle in the 'real world'. I think you could do a great story where he looks for and finds his mate and doesn't know he's being watched by him the whole time. could they build a life together? I'd like to know more about his past. Were 'his people' like him? He called the kids cubs. Were they humans? If he was the lone werewolf does he know where he was from? I think you could do a great job on this.

cannd

Thank you everyone for your feedback. And there was several grammar errors that i had not seen when i was personally editing my story, :) I will take all of your suggestions into consideration as i work on future stories. I might even decide to continue this one and see where is might go. Also, thanks to everyone who favored this story. :D

This was a great story and u should write more.

Please write more. That was amazing. The best I've read on here <3

I enjoyed it.

For a first story, I found it very well written and it 'flowed' very well..

Keep on writing, and perhaps a continuation of this story

Ron

Please continue!! This story has so much potential!!!

this was an amazing story. please you have to write more

this was a very good story! please write more and soon!

great story, hope to see a part 2!

i just love furry on human sex. drives me crazy i agree with everyone else i require more to this story for it makes me hard ;D

Try to keep your prose active. The house was on fire---not active as the house is in a state of BEING on fire. Flames ENGULFED the house---active verb, here. Flames are engulfing the house.

'The sun was shining brightly through the canopy of trees in the local wildlife reserve as a tall young man strolled leisurely down the well-worn hiking trail.'

The sun SHINED brightly through the canopy of trees...

Whenever 'was' is the verb, question the sentence and see if you can make it more active.

Keep at it. You're doing well.

wonderful. Please expand the storyline.

I absolutely loved this story I really wish you would expand on it but I'm thinking in may have a minor in English so I can help you edit your stories before you put them up on here. Shot me an email if you're interested markjackson9053@gmail.com

Great story! I thought this story has a great storyline. As one person put it, human and furry sex. Very hot! Please continue the story. I would love to know if they can have a life together.

I absolutely loved this.

This story was was incredibly well written! I really hope you write more, continuing the story!

Excellent! I'm hoping for more.