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Click hereOnce the crowd was more or less quiet, I got down on one knee and pulled a small box from my pocket. I opened it to show a two-carat diamond ring. Then I asked Dawn to be my wife. Her mouth dropped open, and she screamed, "YES!" Then I took her into my arms and kissed her gently. The crowd went wild.
When we parted, the audience was still cheering. We smiled and waved for a few moments and then started into our last song of the evening, True Love. That night, the song was very special. Months after that performance, I watched the video, especially the shots of the people in the audience. I didn't see very many dry eyes.
We planned to get married two months after the Grammys. But some months ago, we had decided to put Atlanta in our rearview mirror. Neither of us particularly liked living in or near a big city. We talked about moving back to Tifton, but my parents had recently moved to Florida. So, we decided to follow them there and bought a house in the middle of the state. It was about a half-hour away from Orlando. About a week after we settled into our new home, the lawsuits all came to an end. As I expected, everything was to be split 50/50. All that was left was for the accountants to finish their audit. My attorneys were apologizing that they hadn't gotten me more, but I was thrilled. The fight was over, and Tanya was out of my life.
But then a real bombshell hit when the accountant's report came out. Todd had embezzled about two million dollars. The accountants had finally drilled their way through Todd's records to prove the thief. Not only was Todd arrested, but Tanya immediately began divorce proceedings. While Tanya's career was not in danger of ending, her big dream of going to the top with Todd had crashed and burned. You would have thought that I would have been ecstatic, but I just felt sad and tired about the whole mess. Besides, my own life was on the verge of collapsing, and I didn't even realize it.
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Anonymous4 months agoYou have to hand it to 'experts' who believe that a few sentences in a comments section make them writers. Lets see your stories to compare.
Thank you Stoney for writing.
somewhere east of Omaha
Anonymous5 months agoAll these people desperate for revenge on someone that doesn't really matter. Funny how some people will happily ruin their own lives just to get revenge. Prisons are full of such people, bumming or getting bummed. Makes you wonder if those with big revenge obsessions are actually just deeply repressed homosexuals.
Anonymousover 1 year agoThis bitch writer should have written a stronger MC who wanted his revenge, and not a vengeful MC!! Guess cheaters and thieves flourish with this writer
AngelRiderover 2 years agoYou need to learn to limit. I will get to that in a bit but first, part stories suck. They are rarely written well because it stinks to high heaven of organic writing. Once a part is submitted, you can't fix issues with character development or plot that upon further development, do not make sense. The only people who make it work are those who have completed the story but for some inane reason have broken the story into pieces. That makes no sense. I have read the "make it easier to read" argument before but that's just pandering to laziness. There is thing called a bookmark....
Anyway, your story is fine and it started nicely but you failed to drop clues that Tanya was narcissistic and totally lacking in empathy. What you wrote was a long form slut ray/gold digger ray story. She was a bitch when they first met. She wanted to be successful too. Both are a far cry from how you presented her with the divorce. Regardless of your vote score, it didn't work. You wrote with emotion enough to have the reader to be engaged but your story wasn't very good after this part. Everything was forced into the revenge angle. This chapter was boring. The only sympathetic character is the child. That's a problem.
I knew a betrayal was coming. It was expecting it and based upon the descriptions, that revenge was coming. This on its own is not a bad thing. Your second half however does not have the same level of quality as the beginning. Its very very forced and rather obvious.
1959richard2almost 3 years agoThis is the poorest effort by StoneyWebb.
After the third part, lost cohesion and dramatic effects
Give you 3⭐s.
Looking forward to your next story.
I know you will bounce back with a better story 🙂✌.
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sbrooks103xalmost 3 years ago"Tanya immediately began divorce proceedings." - Wait, wait! Didn't her divorce from Robbie just get settled? How could she be married to Todd so fast? Or did I miss something?
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@Anonymous Re: Entertainment law - Yes, I was thinking something similar.
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@Powersworder - Yes, I was hoping he could somehow prove she stole his songs, maybe as Anonymous said, record one before she does.
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I'm still curious who he walks out on after 24 years. Dawn? A FOURTH woman?
Anonymousalmost 3 years agoI was confused at the end of this. It seemed like Robbie and Tanya’s divorce was still underway, waiting only for the financial issues to be settled. (“ About a week after we settled into our new home, the lawsuits all came to an end. As I expected, everything was to be split 50/50. All that was left was for the accountants to finish their audit.” But then “Not only was Todd arrested, but Tanya immediately began divorce proceedings.” Divorce proceedings against whom? Has she married Todd and I just missed it?
Apart from that, I’ve loved this all so far, but I’m trying to figure out how it relates to the very beginning (of Part 1) and I’m interested to see how it will all end.
