All Comments on 'The Gunshot'

The story line was OK. Sadly, too often true also in the US military. I think you used too much military jargon for most readers.

Emerson character is tragically real. Well crafted piece; nice dialogue.

Fist bump girl

Well written, to the point and totally believable. My only complaint is that it's too short. We have a good description of what happened, decent, if brief characterization, but little drama or emotion. I feel with more effort it could be truly excellent, something to get involved with and care about. Despite this it's five stars all day, just a pity there wasn't more.

Kelly did OK, Emerson, not so much. Gotta say something good about the dead-GOOD!!

Very well done, effective and to the point. Looking forward to more of your work.

6 stars

Dead rapists are the best kind.

Unfortunately, she was right- in everything. Karma is wonderful. The Bear approves. 6 stars,I agree. he makes the rest of us males look like shit. Thank you- we're right all rapists.

The BEAR

Very good story. Sooner bastards just need killing. Five stars

Powerful story.

Well done!

Well written. Short and sharp. I frequently grimace inwardly when criminals who rape and kill are sentenced to 20 years and the family of the victim or the police talk about justice for the victim. 5*

Excellent writing with a compressed style that really captures the military rhythm and tone. Her detachment is either a clever portrayal of a psychopath, or reflects an avoidance of a very tricky bit of character development. It would make sense if she were already a trauma victim, but surely she would then show some really unstable behaviour in response to the rape.

I'm not a fan of vigilante justice, but I do like to see people who misuse their authority get their comeuppance. As much as I would have preferred to have Sgt. Emmerson slip and emasculate himself on razor wire, that would lose the satisfaction of the victim (Kelly) taking charge and getting revenge herself. Wonderful dialog and well written (as usual). 5*

Short and to the point. Well written thanks for the read.

Cheers

SAGE

Great and a just, fitting end to him.