All Comments on 'The Hallway'

I enjoyed the imagination of the story and in general I felt it was well written. I have a couple of thoughts if you are interested.

There were a few editorial shortfalls that might have been addressed with someone who could proofread your work. I also felt that, after your heroine blew those two guys, the next people she met were swingers, was a little too convenient. For brevity it did work, but I figure it might have been more realistic if, at first, she met people who were not into what she was offering.

LeBaron1987

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