by BeautifulSeductress
I cant wait to read more! I do hope that you will continue this story at a good length. Im interested in seeing what happens and you write very well. I think your only correction, which is something I often suffer with in my own writing, is sometimes mistaking past and present tense. Otherwise this is great and Ill keep coming back to read in the hopes you continue this!! :)
Love it better than 1st part. Really good and the story flowed well. Keep it up bec I didn’t look at date to see when it was written. Great job! I’m glad I continued on after the 1st part.