All Comments on 'The Hike'

Good first story! Appalachian Trail hikers generally use trail names.

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This is a good story, but it is far too short, and really needs to be continued. Kudos to the author for an excellent first posting.

Good little story, which would have been much better if you stopped the odd switches of tense into present, and even once, future. You struggle with use of both, each, and other, and there was a remaining ‘Parker’ which was disconcerting.

I didn't read past the third paragraph. Any story that begins by rattling off character body dimensions and descriptors almost like sports stats is an immediate pass. Most details don't need to be given, and for the ones that do, reveal them naturally through the course of storytelling. Leaving some things to the reader's imagination instead of lazily listing them is so much more interesting and erotic.