by ainu2
Story has been written honestly very close from the author's heart. It appeals the reader.
I liked this alot. It was really sweet, but still realistic and down to earth. I really liked both characters and it was really romantic, but really hot! To whoever was wondering about condoms: she's on the pill, and neither of them have been involved with anyone else-- no STD's. Come on, they're not lying! It is so hot and fantastic that he can cum in her all day and they will be just fine.
Your story was very sweet & romantic. Ignore the nay sayers who want shorter paragraphs, they're fine as they are.
Pretty good. Could've broken a lot of those paragraphs up...took me a while to read that without crossing eyes.
Excellent story and very hot. As for the negative comment I suggest he read the story. She was on the pill so no undesired pregnancies. They were both virgins so no STD.
Harmless fantasy, I guess - but maybe not - for instance, where's the condom? I guess they live in a world where there are not only no STDs but no undesired pregnancies - nothing but multiple orgasms
Wow, a sexy story where the guy can't do it 9 times in a row! I really enjoyed this. Just to let you know, they seem to be in lust with each other, not love. If you had meant for this to show them bonding as a couple, a few details of shared tastes and discussion could have done it.
This is minor, you did a very nice job!
and well-written, but not easy on the eyes due to the long paragraphs. I suggest that you make them shorter. Good luck on your writing.