All Comments on 'The Hot BBQ'

13? Erotic for teenagers, very much so. Not sure how adults age 20 to 30 would react in such situations, unless they had a mental age of say 15 with and IQ around 50. Out of control hormones and no brains does it every time.

"As I approached the door of your house for a barbeque, I had a moment of anxiety and excitement. I knew he would be pleased with the outfit I had on."

You seem to confuse POV. That's why I didn't bother reading beyond the first two sentences. Find an editor.

Well it was sort of a turn on but there was no depth to the story, just a bit boring really

I like the story, I believe it really happened ;)

You used the same words over and over again. I was so irritated by this that every time I got into the story you did it yet again. It's called a Thesaurus. Use it.