All Comments on 'The Illicit Proposition Ch. 02'

First, I really like the story. You have a good sense of what's erotic, and I like the characters.

But there grammar is really bad, and it's very distracting. I have two suggestions:

(1) If you use Microsoft Word, run the spelling and grammar check. It will find a lot of problems, and help you learn to spot the errors yourself

(2) Use the Literotica volunteer editor program to get some help.

I really hope you work on your writing, because your stories have a lot of potential!

As horny as Betty is, she would make him a good fuck slut that will give him anything he wants and any time he wants her.

Hopefully all of the money and the house is Betty's, and her husband is just a drunken loser that she can get rid of, and Meat can move in and keep her well fucked.

I still want to see Meat fuck the daughter and have both mom and daughter in his bed at night.