All Comments on 'The Incubus's Heart Ch. 01'

Looking forward to the next chapter.....

droning him out mean in the sentence: “She returned to droning him out purely out of habit.”

He was droning, wasn’t he? Does it mean something other than I think it means?

Did you even proofread this? I mean, what is this->

“He didn't know she about her,”

That makes no sense.

Care for your readers enough to proofread. And don’t belabor the point so much - how many paragraphs do you need to tell us how she hates him and feels guilty at the restaurant?

I decided to start posting my stories here to share them with others, and to get better at writing. I am most definitely not a professional, I'm just a lady who enjoys writing smut after the kids are in bed and my work is done!

I appreciate the feedback, and I hope you enjoyed my story despite the typos.

Please ignore the hater in the comment section, I definitely enjoyed this first chapter and am excited to go on to read the next chapter. I loved her conflicting emotions and definitely I can relate to her feelings towards Chip, narcissist are the worst for your well-being. I feel like Seneca's self-confidence has taken a beating for the worse, especially from her relationship with Chip. Saying no can be the hardest thing with someone like Chip. Wonderful character building.