by Nite_
Loved the story - restrained and believable, even if it was over too soon.
Readable, understandable & real, the story's the thing. No distractions, a great first story. I'll be looking for your next submission.
I particularly liked the switch from persuer to persued & the exhibitionism of the pictures & the sensuality of Anette's walk away & undressing, was very erotic.
You're an excellent writer.
What a first story! Loved the tentavive contacts and slow build-up. Hope there's going to be some more.
Well done
There's not a lot to say after fourteen years but I did like the quip about the sick cuckoo on a several day diet of single malt.
all the typos and errors were quite distracting. the story wasn’t great, either
Absolutely, a beautiful story, that "ends too soon"! Well written and the seduction was "off the shelf". All of the content of the story was mesmerizing, to say the least, and "wants" for more chapters. "Please & Thank you"