by Liams
Very hot - well written even if a bit far fetched in this
EEO sue happy world. Nice fantasy. More please.
Sorry -- I know fiction is all about the willing suspension of disbelief, but I couldn't get there. About 1 paragraph into the interview, I couldn't stretch any further. It just wouldn't, couldn't happen.
The story was well written and edited. Like other commenters, I found the details to be unrealistic. While obviously a fantasy, it was the male-centric ideal. Hot women hook up all the time, but we generally don't scissor or do that lame tounge wrapping kiss only found in porn. Hot business women with secrets under their clothes... absolutely true. You were so close to writing one hell of a story. Thanks!
My type of interview. Lovely build up and so squishy.
MaryR
The fantasy was too far over the line for me, so I can't give an honest rating. The writing seemed reasonable, but I felt a bit whipsawed by how often character POV changed. I saw that you did make it clear which character was being heard from, but it still came as a surprise, throwing me out of the story.