All Comments on 'The Invincible Woman'

Look, I think it’s great that you’re putting yourself and your ideas out there, but this story-like everything else you’ve posted-needs more work than I have time to go into. This story doesn’t flow at all: your characters are barely developed (or aren’t developed at all), the plot jumps all over the place, there are incomplete sentences all over the place, it’s packed with superfluous information...nothing about this makes sense! It’s a total mess! I am begging you, consider utilizing the volunteer editing program here; I think it could do you a world of good. I want to see you write out smart, fleshed-out and entertaining stories, I really do-so please, just take my advice!

Anonymous, this is one of his better works. He really isn't capable of writing a coherent story. The sad thing is he thinks he is a writer.