All Comments on 'The Khan Ch. 07: A Tiger Warrior'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
Does not make sense

This chapter, while well written, does not make much sense. Why would they leave her alone with Lakanta, who they said needed watching, especially after the sexual performance. Plus, what was he thinking? He could rape her and her comrades would not care? He would have had to ambush the returning party and kill them to get away with it. If so, he should have gloated about this, heightening tension before he attacked her. Some more thought about these plot points could have improved the story.

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