All Comments on 'The Knight and the Goddess'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Could have been longer.

You do a good job of leading up to the sex acts, but then you rush thru them. What about the rest of the days with the Goddess? Then you could have gone fully into his welcome home by his wife. A good start but as this is an erotica site you need more erotica in your story.

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