All Comments on 'The 'L' Game Ch. 02'

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BrettJBrettJover 14 years ago
2nd comment from BrettJ

Again - I think you're moving a bit too slow. The chapters could have been melded into 1. There should be a payoff in each chapter, not just a tease, or your readers lose interest. We want some sex, it doesn't have to be with Courtney, but you have to have a steam factor SOMEWHERE in each story.

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