All Comments on 'The Lake'

Enjoyable erotic interlude. The writing style doesn’t flow well, mostly because of excessive use of unnecessary ‘he said/she said’ in the speech. There are only two of them, so with care it should be obvious who’s speaking. There were a few loose ends. Language, why did his family seem to be a huge issue, then suddenly not, why the foreign legion...

Can be more good

Frankly, I disagree with the previous comment - the "you said/I said" writing style was quite poetic for me, and made things sound somewhat heady and romantic. I'm not typically into such kinks but the interesting writing style and the obvious enjoyment on both parts made it feel ok and even good to read. Nice job, in my opinion.