All Comments on 'The Landlord Pt. 01'

Please change the name of the characters. Our minds are going to be unconsciously linking them around as the Brady Bunch, even if their relations are different in the story.

Did the current presidential administration inspire your plot? Or is this a flashback to the textile mill towns of the old south? It all sounds quite sinister to me, but you know, there's no sex, reluctance, nor nonconsent in the story, only family corruption. Maybe we need to await future parts?

Alice, should be Land Commissioner and Cousin Oliver, should be Governor.

I like your writing and set up but you barely get into the story before it’s done. Wait until you have more before putting it out

Will be interested to see the next chapters.