All Comments on 'The Last Hunt'

grrr I really hoped she would put him in his place, but I guess this was too much to hope for...

quite stupid story, witch ends without any surprise: 2*

the most banal chapter of this story

Op, this was an amazing story, and I'm so glad you delivered! Much love!

Agree with two of the other anonymous commenters. Not satisfying and banal as hell. Would have been better if she found a way to outsmart him.

Even before the deal is proposed, it becomes obvious that she'll agree.

And it becomes even more apparent with her "plan" to play in to his hand at the pool, until she has a chance. The reader knows what's going to happen. And not in a sexy, will they, won't they way. But more in a contrived, "DO YOU GET IT. YOU THINK SHES GONNA TRICK HIM. BUT SHE ACTUALLY WANTS HIS DICK." way.

This is a master class in tell, not show.

did they marry? or child becomes illegitimate