All Comments on 'The Last Trip'

Excellent location and very good descriptions. The tense changes are a little bit jarring, but no less an author than Dickens made those switches from time to time.

Fun fantasy!

Well written. Vivid. Orgasmic.

Fun little fantasy. Enjoyable read spoiled by the tense changes; stick to one, preferably past as it’s easier and clearer to read. Group sex stories are often difficult to follow because authors assume that just naming everyone is sufficient. In fact your readers struggle to identify who is who, and you need to help them with description and writing style.

Awesome story it kept me reading and rubbing my bulge all the way to the end.

Love the story. Difficult to keep track of the action, switching between characters frequently, even multiple times within one paragraph (see first para of page 3). You also switch between tenses.

tough to follow all the positions and "unsnapping? the bottom of Evelyns one piece swimsuit?