All Comments on 'The Letter'

your writing is OK, so feel free to continue. I suppose you will receive a good number of positive reactions, but I do not necessarily have to endorse the contents. Not out of moral high standards, just because of what I am. I don't like to take by force, I don't like to enslave a partner, I like an equal partner and communication. If others like it the other way, who am I to tell them what they should do. In this story it seems that their problems could or might indeed have been avoided by just telling each other what they liked and exploring everything together. He did try though. Repressed feelings tend to come out eventually and, here, lead her to the wrong decision. If you think my opinion doesn't fit your expectations of comments, just delete this. But why write a story in an attempt to bring out emotions from your readers if you can only accept the feel good comments. Other comments can also serve their purpose, i.e. make you a writer think more about the stories you write rather than just throw some empty words together packed up as a story. G.Belgium

Great first story! You definitely need to write a follow-up. To the previous reviewer, I have to ask, if you don't like force, why the hell are you reading a NonConsent story??? Incubus666, you got a reaction. In my book, that means a job well done. The only bad stories are the ones that leave you feeling nothing at all.

the story is good as it is. no guy should change his ways just because of some poor slut. no part two please

I think you should write another chapter. This guy should take her back on a temporary basis only. Use the bitch, and see if she's real. Have some fun with her. Then throw her worthless ass out on the street.

Pretty decent scribing but end it now.<P>

The story of a freak into pain and submission was properly reacted to by him in her ousting from his life. To then ruin his character traits by also making him a weirdo largely defeats the power of this effort.<P>

Finis and next please.

Continue writing, this has potential! How do you handle a situation like that? The main character seems to love his wife. Should he judge her or not? That is the conflict. We judge too much in our society. If this is what will make them happy, so be it. Good Luck!!

He already got everything he could from her. She is what she said a useless slut with no morals or ethics. Marriage means nothing to her, sex means nothing to her, all that means anything to her is total intimination and humiliation. Nothing a person would want a wife for. She admits she has been used by others she sought out, the medical risk with a woman who has no standards nor interest in safe and sane is to high to even consider. Call her and tell her you could never even consider to see her again and hope she enjoys living with fact she ruined her own marriage and your love for her. That bit of sadistic humiliation should make her cum for days.

I hope you continue, at least for one more story. We all have perceptions of ourselves...honest, moral, and especially "normal". However, I think there's something deeper in all of us that we either try to hide or don't consciously realize it's a part of us. Sometimes a story, movie or book will stir something within us, we know it's there, but we silently sweep it away so that we can stay within that "normal" safety zone. Those that don't can come across as strange or weird to others. But deep down, we all have our secret fantasies and turn ons, realized or not. I feel your story reveals interesting self discoveries in two varying, but similar ways...with two people that may very well belong together, but for very different reasons then the way in which their original relationship brought them together.

Not bad for a first story. My advice to you is write a second chapter only if YOU want to and if you think you can take the story forwards. As for the story itself I know this is really old fashioned but don't people talk to each other any more. You would think just once the soon to be ex-wife would say, "Please darling, please beat me, please whip me, please make me your slut" that's all she had to do. instead she goes out picks some random stranger get him to fuck her and she still isn't satisfied. As for taking her back? It all depends on if he thinks she is worth it. i personally wouldn't take her back unless she spent a year in a hospital talking to a sex therapist and getting all the drugs that were probably pumped into her out of her. I make sure she clean of all infections known to man, and then, and only then would I take her back if at all. She would have to spend the rest of her life married to me or not proving that she meant what she said. She would have to prove that she wasn't the frigid wife any more. She would also have to prove that she would never cheat on me again. I would be her master/husband/boyfriend if she was happy with these conditions then perhaps I would let her persaude me. It might take six months it might take six years. It would all depend on her. BUT I would play my part, if she wants me to be a master to her then that's what I would be!

What a great first submission. It's not my usual genre, but honestly, why complain about the content if you knew what it was when you read it? The author included a note to that effect, ferheavensake! As for continuing, do you want to create a D/s relationship with the couple? Will she submit to him to gain forgiveness or is this really the way she gets off? Or, does he consider her a kinky freak? (He seems pretty freaked out. If he's a nice guy, will he be able to learn to get off himself smacking her, seeing her enjoy it?) Lots to consider for a second chapter. Anyway - keep at it!

I would like to see more. Do they get back together, etc?

This story is strong & can stand alone...it leaves many questions, but at the same time it is complete. More could be very good, I'm not sure how you can proceed and keep the standard you created so far. Either way I will keep a look out.

I like the originality of your plot and the way you allowed at least two mutually exclusive scenarios to be played out in a potential follow up. I was wondering if you share the same question posed by a previous commentators regarding a follow up. If you add another chapter you will most likely have to narrow some of the open scenarios we each can now 'choose' to adopt -each to his/her own taste. Some would most likely like your choice while others might be disappointed. Are you ready to ‘disappoint’ some readers? I say go for it (but than again I am not going to get the criticism…)<p>

Bottom line, there is no right answer here. It's a matter of an aesthetic taste. I like to the most part narratives with fuller, more detailed plots which at the end do not allow for totally contradictory explanations, as in your ending now (nothing wrong with it though). I have no good reason for my preference. If anything, “real life” is more like your current ending. Perhaps in fiction I hope to satisfy my need for somewhat clearer resolutions compared with what I believe most are able to get in their lives (there is no real 'end' in life (until...) <P>

Sorry for rambling and thanks for the read. Whatever you choose to do with this story, keep on writing.

Since I can no longer log into Lit under Incubus666. A reply to some of the commenter.

Originally I had no intention of writing a follow up. I must admit the last invitation was a shameless attempt to elicit comments on the story.

While the scenario is really no where near my own personal sexual preferences the idea was to leave the reader with a quandary. What would he or she have done? To cause them to think about their own thoughts, ideas, and beliefs.

I was enlightened by one poster who automatically assumed the wife, who finally discovered what she needed sexually, was on drugs and may need years of psychotherapy to become what the commenter considered normal.(shakes head)

My thanks to all who read my story, who voted and my special thanks to those who commented even though I may disagree with your comments I thank you for taking the to post a comment.

Mike

Another chapter? yes please!