All Comments on 'The Loners Ch. 03'

more plz

I would like to see more as well. Where are you taking us?

Best story I've read bar none. Youve got yourself another fan!

very well written and the story well awsome

a little odd that they were declaring love for each other after two days, but I dont read fantasy for the realism. Nice work.

I understand you might not want an "editor" to mess with ideas but a proofer for grammar helps improve your credibility. If I have to "auto-correct" your grammar errors while reading it interrupts the story flow. Consider it, please.

So, does "Rachel Lovecraft" exist in the same Literotica universe as "Dawn Lovecraft?" Any chance for a crossover? :D

i would have switched the declarations of love for declarations of mutual attraction. you really didnt need more than an understanding that they like each other and wanted to act on those feelings: having them declare actual love after such a short time is really sudden.

at any rate, still a good story and a good scene.

To soon to declare love I think but otherwise a pretty good start

That, dear author, was the most definitive description of a pleasure giving, and taking, sensual exchange act I have read on this site.

Gawd i am a little flustered, but you really struck a chord in me.

Didn't feel fake at all.

You know a bit like that is good when you feel your stomach doing knots.

My voting

Wonderful on to the next chapter . 5***** by the way as usual .